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Life’s Transience

Tick-Tock, ticking clock

Warning, scaring, reminding

Of life’s transience.

We are but mere visitors

Sustained by nature’s wish.

Copyright @ Goutam Dutta

https://reinventionsreena.wordpress.com/2020/10/08/reenas-exploration-challenge-156/

COLLEEN’S 2020 WEEKLY #TANKA TUESDAY #POETRY CHALLENGE NO. 198, #POET’SCHOICE

30 thoughts on “Life’s Transience”

  5. Goutam, I’m thinking your third line is your pivot… The word, “of” is a preposition. The English language has so many peculiarities. I would refrain from using prepositions at the beginning or end of a phrase in tanka because they just take up space with no meaning gleaned from the word. Instead, you should some kind of action (verb) like “moves on” so it would read: life’s transience moves on… With that being said, this is a very apt tanka for life and I like it very much. ❀

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    1. Thank you so much for the detailed feedback. Yes, I did intend the 3rd line to be the pivot. Noted your suggestion about using of preposition. Will need
      to practice more. Thank you. πŸ˜ŠπŸ™

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      2. Yes, it is a beautiful resort….a small one but away from the hustle and bustle of the famous hill station of Ooty. A quaint little place. Apparently used to belong to a British tea planter who sold it once he left, post 1947.

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